Studio Brief 2-Telling Stories (Second Draft)

Telling Stories- Second Draft                   Jack and Jill

This is the second storyboard sketch in  pen and more detail so the characters can be seen more and the story looks more developed overall. I like how the story is coming along but i still need to tweak sections and panels to make them look more professional. 

 In this panel you can see the introduction of the characters, scenery/ location as well as what jack is doing. I have changed the story to my interpretation where Jack and Jill are together as i felt that the story held more drama and is more of a love story than just about someone falling.

 These two next sections are full of motion and camera movements as Jack is falling down the hill with the camera tracking his movements, but also Jill is running down after him so the camera is moving about making the whole scene look more dramatic if its movments are done the same.
I have also included little effects, like when Jill  sees Jack fall, the whole scene goes dark to show that all she can see is Jack on the ground and nothing around her, this adds tension.

 This panel is showing their relationship in more detail as Jill is running to Jack and she falls into the hug to make sure hes ok. In the first panel i will also zoom in and show the wound as this is to show what happened in the fall as this view is too far away to see.
The sillhouettes of Jack and Jill walking home is from behind as its like your following behind seeing what they see just so the viewers can see the location. Jill is then helping to fix Jacks wound.

This last two frames are just to show what Jill was using as it is an old method of bandaging someone, the light makes it also look like it is on his desk just to make it clear that they are fixing the wound in his room like in the rhyme.
It then ends with the two falling asleep with Jacks head fixed and the camera from above shoing the them both.